Dr. Jamie Bondage

I like this. It's fun. And I love pirates. XD It doesn't seem long enough. what does the water feel like? taste like? How does the crew feel? are any ...

This was good. It was extremely vague and short. I would suggest expanding on your ideas. What are you feeling? What are you trying to get across to the reader? ...

This seems sort of repetitives. I liked it, but it seems way too repetitive. My suggestion would be to add more verses. another thing is that the second verse doesn't ...

This was good, but it didn't flow well. It seemed to forced. Just because something rymes doesn't mean it flows. The last two verses seemed forced. write from your heart ...

I liked the message, but it didn't flow. I would suggest making this a song or putting it in other poetry. Other than that, this was good. it just really ...

This was amazing! I only saw one mistake. His love still knew That if her left He would come undone This either needs to be "That if she left" or ...

First: Capatalize the first word of the lines. shes looks outside her window, hoping to the sun again. (This doesn't make sense to me. Plus, capitalize "shes" and add an ...

It was confusing to me what you were talking about. I would suggest lengthening it so that the reader knows what you are trying to say. A mental picture is ...

I think this is really good! It seems a bit repetitive some places, but really heart wrenching, especially because I know where it's coming from. It was really good. I ...

I really like this! It's really good. XD I like the "paintbrush and pen" analogy. I thought it was well written! I agree. You should change that one line. But, ...

It was good, but extremely repetitive. I think I only saw one verse. the rest was the chorus. And your really don't need to repeat "One day" over and over ...

That was amazing!!!! It was wonderful!!!!! I just about cried! It's so sad and sweet! I absolutely love it. Only problem I saw was in the second stanzas (or third) ...

This is really short, and to me it doesn't flow. I like the hidden meaning...but, I don't think it flows well. I would suggest lengthening it, and working on the ...

It seems too repetitve. It seems like you repeat the same almost exact wording over and over again. Like you didn't know how to make the song long enough, so ...

This was very choppy. It didn't flow at all! I liked the idea, but it was also confusing. It seemed repetitive on the chorus. I don't really know how to ...